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In many families today, both the parents are working. What are the advantages and disadvantages of it?

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Should
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work
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One
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 famous journal stated that if
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 mother and father are working the youth will be neglected.
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, some argue that financial circumstances dictate the situation and they must go to jobs to balance their lives. I believe there are benefits and drawbacks on
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 sides.
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 with, from a financial perspective
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parents
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 are forced to
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 sometimes in order to provide for the kids. To illustrate
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, when
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work
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 at the same time they will be in a better position to cover the child’s expenses. As is known that these days everything is expensive.
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, education fees these days are extremely inflated. Previously, the fee for
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 was around fifteen thousand riyals but now it is around thirty thousand riyals.
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, toys and clothes are becoming more and more expensive. Technology has advanced so much that a child’s toy can cost more than a thousand riyals. Ads these days are advertising toy laptops and toy smartphones for children.
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,
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 problem of
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parents
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 in
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 is that the child will be neglected.
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, they will suffer from many perspectives.
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, schoolwork will inevitably suffer.
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, if a child is not doing well at school who will take care of
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 if
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parents
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 are too busy working. Schools have too many children to deal with so they might not solve the problem.
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, the psychological effects of
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 on the child can be catastrophic. There is no
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 to guide the youth the way the
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 would. A kid must have motherly and fatherly attention. To sum up, I believe that whether the
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work
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 or not a minor must get sufficient attention. Perhaps the
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 stay in touch with the juvenile from
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.
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, they must spend time with them and not be too busy after returning from
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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