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In may countries, their is shortage of housing due to over population. Some people argue that new towns should be built in the countryside , other argue to regeneration of cities. What are the a6and disadvantages of building new towns in the countryside.

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population
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 is increasing double the rate than the past era. Due to
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, accommodation facilities are highly demanded in
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. While some argue that to overcome the need
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 houses, it's better to develop rural
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, some
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 idea would cause serious
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 to the native
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 in towns.
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advocate
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 the merits and demerits. Nowadays,
population
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 growth is not in the control, where
cities
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 are facing inadequate housing facilities. To sort out
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 which results in
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 of globalization and
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job opportunities for local community
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. Significantly, the poverty rate will
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 diminish.
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, the government's economic level will increase, by exporting, importing and paying taxes.
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drastic
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economic
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 level.
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, if converting the villages into
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would cause serious consequences.
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, migrate
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 from urban
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 to
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the country
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countryside
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country side
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 will definitely rise
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water scarcity.
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, in Tamil Nadu, the majority of citizens facing detrimental water problems, due to
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overpopulation
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over
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population
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.
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, construction of high building like apartment,mall and complex will consumes huge to build and
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 trees needs to cut down.
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 would change the climatic conditions to
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 and environmental will cause impact. To conclude, creating a village in
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 will not be a solution for
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overpopulation
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over
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overpopulation
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population
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. To deal with
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 issues the government has implemented
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strict
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strick
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rule
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, which has been implemented.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overcrowded cities
  • distribute the population evenly
  • congestion
  • natural surroundings
  • quality of air
  • well-being
  • infrastructure
  • investment
  • resource-intensive
  • environmental impact
  • agricultural land
  • natural habitats
  • wildlife
  • ecosystems
  • rural economy
  • job opportunities
  • rural depopulation
  • social disruption
  • urban design
  • sustainable
  • livable towns
  • urban sprawl
  • inefficient land use
  • dependency on cars
  • modern urban design principles
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