Many think that in today’s world it is very difficult for people to maintain a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, feel that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Leading a healthy lifestyle seems to be difficult in
this
modern world, according to some. Others,
however
, consider it is possible if they are willing to keep not only fit but healthy as well. In my opinion, I agree with the latter’s view since the latest technology and gadgets are available. On the one hand, people who argue maintaining physical fitness is a real challenge believe that stress and
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life
are the two main causes. Due to the various factors: personal and
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professional

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reasons lead to undue
tenstions
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tensions
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and worries, tiredness, and lack of energy are often leading to
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diseases.
Similarly
, having a busy
life
, people often forget
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exercises
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and taking sufficient resting time
also
prevent them
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health and fitness at an optimum level. Even though
this
scenario is true to
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extent, it has been noted that it is possible to have
healthy
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a healthy

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living. On the
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other

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hand, opponents of the above-mentioned argument think that
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time offers
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plenty of opportunities to keep fit and healthy.
Firstly
, since the access to use the internet, different kinds of tips and tricks are available;
for instance
, how to avoid tension, when to exercise with limited pieces of equipment, and good eating habits and so on. If these facilities did not find now, there would see more patients.
Therefore
, I firmly believe that those who are willing to take effort could lead both stress and
disease free
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life
. In conclusion, people have different opinions on whether
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modern
life
ensures healthy living or not. I personally consider that due to the presence of the internet and other gadgets, it is possible.
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