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You read in a newspaper that a company is going to renovate some school buildings in your local area that are in a poor condition. You would like to offer help. Write a letter to the charity paying for the renovation. In your letter • explain why you want to help with the renovations • suggest what you can do to help • say when you are available to start work

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I am writing to you regarding your letter about the rent increase. I was surprised when I got your message about the rise in charges.
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 I agree that the apartment is well connected to the main road and is situated close to healthcare and public transport facilities , the fact is that other tenants in
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 complex are paying a lower price than what we are currently paying. Recently, I was affected by layoff’s that happened in my organization due to Covid-19. We were able to barely survive on my husband’s Salary and the circumstances have drained my savings completely and I will not be able to afford any surge in spending. I have joined a new firm
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 the situation will be better in the upcoming months.
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, if you continue to insist on the rent increase, we will have
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 other option but to move to another house in the same locality.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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