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Education and health care should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Governments require to invest more in building
schools
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 and
hospitals
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 in order to offer these are free, according to some.
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, I firmly believe that even though it is good to be funded these areas by authorities,
financial
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the financial
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 status of patients and aptitude of students need to be taken into account before deciding whether they are eligible to receive the free
services
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. Admittedly, providing education and health
services
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 without any charges is impressive to a certain extent, but it may not be feasible as well as possible. Because many nations are either underprivileged or
their
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some privileged citizens exploit the free
services
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 for wrong causes, the
intension
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 of the policy hardly attains its intended results.
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, in India, many affluent families
enroll
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 in state-owned
schools
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 and admit government founded
hospitals
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 even though they are capable to afford private institutions. By doing
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, they exploit the
services
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are
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 planned to benefit the
lower income
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 group.
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, if the authorities develop a plan to find suitable candidates to receive free
services
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 would be better.
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, talented and interested students of financially unstable families need to be selected to receive
education
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an education
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 without any fees.
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, patients
belonged
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who belonged
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to
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below the poverty line should not be charged at both
hospitals
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 and clinics to avail treatments. To illustrate
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, Kerala, an Indian state, where different insurance policies are developed to
teat
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treat
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 poor patients free of cost, and in
schools
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, economically weaker students are supported by lump some grands. In conclusion, some advocate that
schools
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 and
hospitals
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 should not charge fees from their customers. In my view, citizens should be monitored for their
eligibilities
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eligibility
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 to receive
this
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 scheme,
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otherwise
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,otherwise
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 the countries will become financially drained.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • socioeconomic status
  • equal opportunities
  • financial burden
  • economically disadvantaged
  • public health expenditures
  • workforce
  • economic growth
  • waiting times
  • government budgets
  • financial constraints
  • higher taxes
  • reallocation
  • privatization
  • quality services
  • inequality
  • fulfill responsibility
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