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living in a country where you have to speak foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. to what extend do you agree or disagree

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Immigration is constantly on
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the rise
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rise
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. It is undeniable that
people
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 migrate to developed countries to improve their standard of living or getting higher education. I support
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 statement that speaking
overseas
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the overseas
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language
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 in a foreign territory create serious issues in practical life. By analysing that
people
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 faced difficulty in socialising and getting employment have proven
this
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. Let`s begin by looking
the
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 communication problems that arise on moving to a foreign state.
For instance
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, many
pakistani
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Pakistani
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 students go abroad for having professional degrees to build their
career
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. But unfortunately
unfamilier
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unfamiliar
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 with the mother
tounge
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tongue
 of the outside nation cause serious social issue
such
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 as they are not able to convey their message in a proper way.
In addition
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, unable to communicate with other students make them alone, frustrated and homesick.
Secondly
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, it is commonly seen that a
numer
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number
 of
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 migrate to other countries to explore employment opportunities.
Although
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, it is
noticable
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noticeable
 that
people
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 always face trouble in getting
piece
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a piece
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 of work in
overseas
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an overseas
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 country. Take
a
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 example of
underdeveloped
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an underdeveloped
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 country community
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 travel to developed states for work to acquire high salaries . But sadly it creates complications for them
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 as
first
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 they have to learn
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a
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language
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 for having a piece of work.
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, they can not stand for the violation of their rights because they are unable to understand
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the
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rules and regulations of that country written in their own
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. To summarise, unknown
language
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 is a great barrier
for
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 communication and have a negative impact on
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apply
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practical life. It is extremely recommended to take
foriegn
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foreign
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 course before making
plan
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a plan
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 to move abroad to improve lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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