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in many families today, both the parents are working. what are the advantages and disadvantages of it?

#families #parents
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In
this
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 competitive world, earning
money
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 is enormous hard for some masses, who are uneducated and
money
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 is a fundamental need for every human being to survive in an exorbitant world;
however
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, in present time in most families father and mother
both
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 are working and it has
both
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 merits and demerits. In
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 essay, I explain
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 of the aspects in
further
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 paragraphs. Focusing on the positive side, earning a handsome amount of
money
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 is always beneficial for every folk because they can fulfil their daily needs and
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 they could save
money
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 for the future.
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, if
both
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parents
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 are working
then
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 they can give better lifestyle and education to their
children
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, which helps them for their future career.
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, one of the surveys conducted in the USA state that there are 60% of the family,
both
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parents
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 are working,
thus
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 they can fulfil their
children
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 requirements on facilitate way. Focusing on the darker side, if
both
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parents
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 are working
then
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 it creates a vulnerable situation for their
children
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 because
parents
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 could not spend adequate quality time with their child and,
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, sometimes they make unordinary friends throw online and often attempt
crime
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. To illustrate, in India,
crime
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 rates incline tremendous on teenagers and one of the surveys reveals that 40% of offenders who attempts
crime
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, their
both
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parents
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 are working. To conclude,
although
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 working with
both
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parents
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 are always beneficial because they can fulfil their needs, but if
parents
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 could not take care of their
children
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 activity
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children
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 feel vulnerable and often attempt
crime
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.
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