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Modern technology has made it easier for individuals to download copyrighted music and books from the internet for no charge. To what extent is this a positive or a negative development?

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In the era of the Internet and modern technology, copyrights have evolved as a topic of concern, as copyrighted
music
 and
books
 can now be downloaded free of charge. From my perspective, I believe that
this
 may lead to devastating consequences, which far outweigh its benefits. As a matter of fact, having the right to listen to songs or read
books
 without being required to make a purchase does bring about certain advantages. With a few simple mouse-clicks, individuals,especially those with low financial budgets, may have easy access to a wide range of information from
books
 ,as well as a great source of copyrighted songs.
For instance
,since teenagers are unlikely to possess a lot of money, if they are provided with free access to
books
 and
music
, they may
being
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 facilitated to enrich their knowledge and acquire the ability to perceive
music
 better.
However
, in my opinion, compared with the negative impacts, the positive impacts pale
in significance
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. As the copyrighted contents are freely distributed, the career of many creators
such
 as songwriters,
music
 artists and authors might be put in penicuary disadvantages. Because they receive a significantly low turnover, it may be an arduous challenge for them to meet their personal demands,
therefore
, the higher chance they might stop producing more products in the not distant future.
Additionally
, since there is a free approach to copyrighted goods, many evildoers tend to take advantage of
those intellectual property
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 to make money or turn them into their own products.
As a result
,producers are being disregarded and that tendency is
in contrast
 to moral principles.
Thus
,users had better pay for copyrighted
books
 and
music
. To conclude,
although
free
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the free
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 charge of
books
 and songs is beneficial, in my viewpoint, it is more disadvantageous when taking the copyrights issue into consideration.
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