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Some people believe that the goverment should takr care of old people and provide financial support after they retire. Others say indiciduals should save during their working years to fund their own retirement. What is your opinion? Is it a positivr or negative development?

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There has been a mixed opinion on whether
government
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the government
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 should take
care
 of old
people
 by providing financial support after they retire or they should take
care
 of themselves. I strongly feel that
governments
 need to take
care
 of the elderly
people
 in their old age. Elderly
people
 are the pillars of the society who has led their lives in shaping the future of the country. During their working
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years
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 individuals have a lot on their plate to take
care
 of like providing for the family, taking
care
 of their parents, providing for
children’s'
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children's
 education and etc.
In addition
 to
this
, every person pays taxes as their part to develop the society. In few
countries
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people
 almost pay 30% of their income as taxes to the government. It is the
governments
' responsibility to take
care
 of their citizens at their old age. With many responsibilities on their heads, few individuals may fail
fund
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for
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their retirement. In
such
cases
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governments
 can lend their hands to
such
people
 who have worked hard their entire lives so that they can retire peacefully. The
governments
 can take initiatives to help these
people
 by establishing nursing homes, providing retirement funds to employees and etc. In conclusion, I strongly believe that all the
governments
 should start initiatives to provide financial support to old
people
 after they retire.
This
 gives an assurance to the individuals regarding their retirement.
This
 a positive development towards the economy of any country.
Such
 agendas make the countries more sustainable in terms of
people
 welfare.
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