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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this ? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Organisations are agued that their
products
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 are unique compare to
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another
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 one in their advertisements due to public demands and to take stand in business competitions and
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 consider that as a negative trend.
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first
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 and foremost reason is
public
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the public
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 wants something unique. To elaborate
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 notion, all the
companies
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 are producing
products
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 in order to customer’s demand because these days peoples want uniqueness in
products
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.
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, if
company
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a company
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 produce something different from others so it can be beneficial for
companies
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 growth by more sell.The
second
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 important reason is, to take
stand
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a stand
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 in
this
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 competitive business market. Nowadays, all the authorities are in raw to become popular and to enhance their business level in the world.
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, it affects negatively
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public due to several reasons. When
companies
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 spend more money on advertisements, they cover up that advertisement fund by
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the increasing
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price
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the price
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 of
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product
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the product
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. These days when authorities launch any
products
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 in market they enhance price rate of that
product
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 compare to old
one
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ones
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. Because of
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 the customers have to pay more money and it directly
affect
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 on people’s income.
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, when mobile
companies
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 launch any mobile so they provide more focus on advertisements and that mobiles uniqueness features as well.
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, they increase
price
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the price
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 rate of that device as compare to
old
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the old
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 model.
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, sometimes people have to do compromise to purchase that
product
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 due to higher rates. In conclusion,
companies
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shows
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 their
product
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 in
smart
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 way by advertising and provide focus to take
stand
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a stand
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 in
market
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the market
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 is worthy for
companies
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 but not better for customers in
positive
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a positive
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 way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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