Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this.

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Smoking tobacco in public
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as workplaces and restaurants has been banned in some countries recently.
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, other countries have not restricted smoking in public.
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, It might impact
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income. Some people who used to
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in restaurants and coffee shops consider that if
government
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restrict smoking in these areas, It would drive customers away and
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can be harmful to businesses.
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, critics of
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ban
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highlight the decrease in the government's revenue which
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from high taxes paid by tobacco
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manufacturers
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and smokers. If cigarettes
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would mean lesser taxes and lesser revenue for the government. On the one hand, Those who are against smoking in public
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claim that passing a law to prohibit smoking in public
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can reduce the possibility of second-hand
smoke
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being inhaled by
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non-smokers
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.
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result
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in non-smokers
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lung and heart cancer.
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can lead to an increased risk of respiratory diseases and heart cancer. By restricting the
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where people can
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,
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can be prevented.
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, supporters
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that states and cities which have non-smoking policies and prohibited smoking have clearer air
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, as opposed to countries that don't have any restriction on smoking.
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, I would tend to side with the supporters of
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ban. It seems to be reasonable to prohibit smoking in public
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, which
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the possibility of non-smokers
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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