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Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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As human is a social animal, it is obvious to form connection wherever they live or
work
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. Some people suggest
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 on the task assigned rather than making relation with the colleague at your
organization
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. I strongly disagree with
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 point of view as I believe that harmony and comfort brought by establishing connections will help to grow the individual and
organization
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 too.
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 of all, a relationship built at the office is crucial both for maintaining contentment as well as to avoid stress and pressure. Association among people helps them to
work
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 as a team and to achieve their targets.
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, small celebrations of achievements as a family at the workplace rise up the happiness meter that in turn, motivates the employees to
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 harder. While there is no question about the value of being focused on the goal, it is clear that harmony among the workers
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 makes an essential contribution.
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, comfort and loyalty produced by alliances at the office
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 increase the
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's output. It is beneficial for any corporate to provide a comfortable and positive
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 environment that enhances the efficiency of the workforce and
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, the yield of the company.
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 it appears that the distraction caused by relations may lead to a decrease in productivity, it can be argued that connections help to make people more confident in fact, more productive. In conclusion, it is illogical to suggest that no one should establish any relationship at their
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 as it leads to more stress in individual and distract them from the main aim. I recommend maintaining a healthy connection with co-workers so that harmony and comfort created to give rise to more productive and fruitful results to the
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.
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