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In many countries, government prioritizes economic growth above all other concerns. What are the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion.

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In most of the constitutions around the world, the ruling body is more concerned about rising their income putting all the other factors aside.
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 type of strategy has both pros and cons.In the following paragraphs , I will outline both benefits and drawbacks of
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 a decision and give my opinion. To start with, there are basically two advantages if the Government's highest priority is to enhance the economy.The
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 outcome is development.That means, as the production of goods and services increases ,unemployment decreases .
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, one of the major hindrances to the bright future of a nation gets undermined.
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, as indigenous manufacturing of the items increases , the state becomes self-sufficient and in
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 a way can decrease the foreign imports.
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, if we can develop our own household items, importing those things from another country gets down to a large percentage.
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 , concentrating only on economic growth by increasing the industries have the following drawbacks.Mainly, poverty may increase if welfare services are not properly implemented.
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, illiteracy and death due to hunger hit the country .
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, a huge increase in the number of factories may lead to air pollution and
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 may have to be handled afterwards .
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, allowing an industry at the centre of the city and
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 calling it off as it is generating a lot of smoke is really difficult.These reasons make me feel that along with the idea of increasing wealth ,other factors which decide the upliftment of a nation are
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 required to be given equal importance. To conclude,
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 prioritizing the economic growth makes the country stand out at a global level by not depending on others for the basic necessities, I believe that it is indeed necessary to look after the vital needs of the people for the overall development of a constitution rather than working only on generating income sources.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prioritizes
  • economic growth
  • employment opportunities
  • public services
  • tax revenues
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental degradation
  • industrial expansion
  • income inequality
  • wealth accrues
  • neglect
  • social issues
  • metrics
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