Some people think that watching television does not make people smarter. Other people think that watching television can be informative. Which opinion do you agree with and why?
From the prehistoric era,
television
is playing an essential role in human life. few people
think watching television
is a waste of time while
others believe, it is a source of conveying significant information
. Indeed, television
is a non-replaceable thing from
human life because it does not only broadcast Change preposition
in
information
but also
keep
us updated with current trends.
There are many reasons why Correct subject-verb agreement
keeps
people
think television
does not make people
smarter. Firstly
, for getting information
there are lots of other options available for people
like newspaper
, radio, Fix the agreement mistake
newspapers
Correct word choice
and podcast
podcast
. These options are not only cheap in price but Fix the agreement mistake
podcasts
also
give specific information
and the user can read that
news in which he is interested. Correct determiner usage
the
Secondly
, nowadays people
carry smartphones, so they can watch personalised news as well as
serials on smartphones. Along with
this
, watching television
at a place also
promote
a sedentary lifestyle and Correct subject-verb agreement
promotes
make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
people
lazier. for
instance, a study found that Capitalize word
For
people
who spend six to seven hours watching TV
suffered
from obesity, Wrong verb form
suffer
diabetes
kind of disease. Correct word choice
and diabetes
Therefore
, TV
is not making people
smarter but make
them lazy.
There are, Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
however
, some people
including me who think TV
is essential for broadcasting information
. First and foremost, the Visual things are easy to understand and remember. When we get information
visually we will remember it for a long time. For instance
- A study published in Newyork
Times found that things which we can see by eys remember for a long time rather than we read. Correct your spelling
New York
In addition
to this
, get
Wrong verb form
getting
information
from television
is not time-consuming. you can get complete world's
news and current trends in just an hour Change noun form
world
whereas
people
need to spend few
hoursCorrect article usage
a few
read
the same Wrong verb form
reading
information
from the newspaper. clearly, watching TV
help us to up
to date with current world affair with visuals.
In conclusion, Add a missing verb
be up
Although
watching TV
promote a sedentary lifestyle, its proliferate advantages gain much more attention than other media channels. I agree it is the best source for conveying information
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