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some people believe that the best way to travel within a city is by car. others argue believe it is best to travel by bicycle. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days use of fossil fuels is enormous which is why air pollution increased;
however
 few people think that vital path to roam within the city by
bicycle
 while others pretend that with a car. If asked, I disagree with the sentence that bicycles fulfil our needs all the time and ample reasons for that discussed in
further
 paragraphs. The foremost reason for my support is, nowadays masses
travel
 a significant compare to the past;
hence
, if community
travel
 with their family
then
 it is not possible to
travel
 by
bicycle
. To illustrate, in an individual family if parents live with their kids
then
 children might not
drive
bicycle
 properly and it is
also
 risk for an accident.
As a result
, a car is an inevitable need for them.
Moreover
, sometimes medical emergency occurs
then
travel
 by
bicycle
 consume plenty of time and it is
also
 a risk for patient life. Another reason for my support is, physical handicapped could not
drive
 bicycles frequently and it is
also
 a serious situation to
drive
 a
bicycle
 on a traffic jams road.
Furthermore
, an ageing person might be not physically fit to
drive
 the cycle.
For instance
, most elder people suffering from diseases
such
 as cardiac and blood pressure,
thus
 it is a tremendous danger for them.
However
, adult and adolescents should us cycle more than a car because it enhances their physical strength ,
although
 using
bicycle
also
 decrease noise and air pollution because the use of non-renewable fuel: oil and petrol would be
also
 declined. To conclude,
although
 every individual could not
drive
bicycle
 for travelling within the city due to their physical ability.
However
, adults and younger should use more cycles for
this
.
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