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In some countries married couples plan to have a baby at a later age due to the demands of their professional career. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of it and give your opinion

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There are lots of married couples in the world. Some couples think that having a
baby
 at
later
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age
 but others think that having a
baby
 at
early
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an early
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age
.
This
 situation has both advantages and disadvantages.The main advantage of having a
baby
 at
early
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an early
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age
 is growing up with a
baby
 while its main disadvantage
is not be
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is not
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 able to spend too much time with
children
. The advantage of having a
child
 at a late
age
 is growing up with a
child
. You do things in the world that you've never experienced before with your
child
. it's easier for parents and
children
 to understand each other because the ages are closer.
Therefore
,
children
 can feel closer to their parents and consult them about everything.
On the other hand
,there is
disadvantage
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a disadvantage
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 of having a
bay
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baby
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 at
later
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a later
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age
 due to the demands of their professional career is not be able to spend too much time with
children
.Parents can't spend time with
children
 when they're constantly working to make their
children
 a better future.
That is
way
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, the intimacy between them is getting weaker and
fianlly
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finally
, the
child
 feels alone. In conclusion,the number of couples having
children
 at a late
age
 is increasing nowadays. there are pros and cons of having a
baby
 at
later
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a later
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age
 due to the demands of their professional career.
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