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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than complete become more useful adults.

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People have different views about whether
children
 should be competitive or cooperative. While a spirit of competition can sometimes be useful in life, I believe that the ability to co-operate is more important. On the one hand, competition can be a great source of motivation for
children
. When teachers use games or
prize
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 to introduce an element of competitiveness into lessons, it can encourage
children
 to work harder to be better than the other pupils in the class.
This
 kind of healthy
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rivalry
 may help to build
children
's
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 while pushing them to work independently and progress more quickly. When these
children
 leave school , their confidence and determination will help them in competitive
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situation
situations
such
 as job interviews.
Therefore
, it can
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be said
said
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 that
children
 should be prepared to be competitive. Student
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behaviour
 can certainly be improved. I believe that the change must start with parents, who need to be persuaded that it is important to set strict rules for their
children
. When
children
 misbehave or break the rules, parents should apply reasonable punishments to make them understand that actions certainly have
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also
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 schools could play an important role in training both
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 and parents to use effective
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disciplinary
 techniques. at the same time, famous people
such
 as
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 and musicians need to understand the responsibility that they have to act as role models to
children
. In conclusion,
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 believe
children
 should learn
competitive
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skill
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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