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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Recently, it has become the norm that multinational corporations have
rising
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 tendency to operate in
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developing
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. While
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 trend has significant advantages, there are some drawbacks that it caused.
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 with, the
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 obvious benefit that international
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 offer to
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-world
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 is that they significantly reduce the unemployment rates.
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 owing to the fact that since
income
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 of these
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 citizens are low in comparison to developed nations income, these
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 offer
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attractive remuneration
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 in those
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 local currency
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 most of the local
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 are more likely to accept.
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 to that, the
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 of these international
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 gain pivotal
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 experience. Another advantage is that these
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 are contributing
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 enhancing these
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economy
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economies
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.
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 is because when there
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 an increased number of
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 force receiving higher salaries, they pay more taxes to their
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;
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, they play an integral part to improve their
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 infrastructure,
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,
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country
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a country
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 like Kenya is a clear
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 of
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 improvement.
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, these
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 have caused a stressful life for their
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 despite the high pay grade they offer.
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 based on the fact that these
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 have rigorous
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policy
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 to meet their deadlines in time.
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, they force their
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 to
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 for 10 hours or more
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no on a daily basis with no weekends in order to finish their tasks.
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, many of these
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 started to develop depression, even some of them committed suicide because of being unable to handle
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 harsh conditions. Another demerit of
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 development is that the business of these
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 has a detrimental effect on the environment.
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 is because they mainly aim to build factories at lower
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costs
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 that eventually produce harmful fumes;
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 due to the developed
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 do not have laws that forbid
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 activities or impose higher taxes.
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noticeable air pollution, because of the great number of multinational
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’ factories located there. In conclusion, despite multinational
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 indeed have benefits for individuals
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securing
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 job opportunities with high paygrade
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 the economic benefit to
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the host
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 country, there are negative effects that these
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 caused
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 as extreme
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 conditions and environmental damage.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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