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Scientists predict that all people will choose to talk the same global language in the future. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Languages
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 the culture in which an individual is born. It is believed by scientists that the entire world population will speak a common
language
 in the future. In my
opinion
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this
 is a negative development and it is necessary for them to exist and flourish . There are two reasons to consider these developments will negatively affect society.
First
 of all,
languages
 are closely associated with the local identity as well as the culture. So people forgetting their mother tongue will result in
disappearance
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 of the community.
For example
 in the Maldives, the local indigenous tribes have got extinct because of the invasion of foreign nationals.
Finally
, the intricacies, the history of its origin and the ancient scriptures written will
also
 be lost with its extinction.
Hence
languages
 are necessary to be preserved. Wars have been fought and nations have been divided on the basis of
languages
. The Sri Lankan war
among
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 the LTTE and
SriLankan
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Sri Lankan
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tamils
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 is still underway and
language
 is one of the reasons for discrimination between the two communities. At the same time, speaking a global
language
 will stop discrimination among nations,
thus
 improving the relationship between countries by forming a strong bond between them.
Furthermore
, it will be easier for students to travel for studies as well as better job opportunities in a foreign land. In summary, multiple
languages
 should exist and the native speakers should continue conversing in their mother tongue to preserve the identity as well as the culture.
However
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 a common global
language
 can exist for improving the relation and bonding between countries.
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