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IN SOME CULTURES, CHILDREN ARE OFTEN TOLD THAT THEY CAN ACHIEVE ANYTHING IF THEY TRY HARD ENOUGH. WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES ANS DISADVANTAGES IF GIVING CHILDREN THIS MESSAGE?

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In various cultures, is it right to tell
children
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 frequently that they can attain anything if
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the
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 try hard enough? Giving advice to
children
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 to strive hard will give them pressure to attain their goals, getting
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 pushed and advice from parents or family can make the child work harder to obtain the desired outcome, making him/her feel that they are supported in the journey and were able to open their
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 to some positive outcomes, gaining
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 and overcome fears in
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.
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, some
children
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 who were not able to receive or being told to try harder and supported does not gain the perception for achieving goals, ambition and developed poor
confidence
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. In my opinion,
children
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 will benefit more from hearing the message “try harder” as well as being, supported, even if there are some cultural differences, no matter what culture you have if we have full support
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 our
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, they can achieve anything. The greatest benefit of giving
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 message is that they will have
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a positive
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mindset
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, attitude and
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 that will help them in
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 experiences and that will improve themselves as people.
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, they cannot overcome
life
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’s challenges. Being in Asia, growing up and fully supported by my family I was able to push through all the challenges in
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.
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, I grew up in Filipino culture, my parents died when I was 10 years old and my siblings constantly pushing me to be diligent in all my
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, until I reached my goal to become a professional physician. All these beneficial
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 experiences, geared up with positive character
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 me as a person. The main challenges that
children
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 will face, lacking these positive traits can pose them with massive obstacles in
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. Having poor
confidence
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, no ambition and support from others can make way to some serious troubles.
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, being a thief because they are lazy to find work to earn funds. Not going to school or college to finish and get a degree. Without motivation from others or familial support can lead to these issues. In summary,
children
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 being encouraged to try harder ultimately become more successful in their
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. These positive traits will help them overcome all the
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 they will face in their lifetime
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