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The quality of the health care a person receives should not depend on the size of their bank balance. The government is responsible for providing a high level of healthcare for all its citizens. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays
people
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 are an enormous going through a sedentary lifestyle and,
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, they obtain chronic disease, whose
treatment
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 needs a significant amount of money. It presumes that the quality of medical care does not depend on their wealth but authorities should entrust for giving better level of health care for their citizen. If asked, I agree with
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 give a statement and ample reasons for that explained
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 in the ensuing paragraphs.
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 with, these days the ratio of poor
people
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 and a reach inclined day by day,
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, all societies does not have equal wealth it is a rudimentary thing for a cabinet to give therapy on a free of cost or lower rate to their citizen.
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, due to hectic
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people
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 often diagnose chronic diseases
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 as heart attack and cancer, and cure for
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 need exorbitant value. Lung transplant takes as an example, the cost for
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 is tremendously expensive, which every
people
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 could not afford it.
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, the cabinet should invest a vast amount in research vaccines for acute diseases
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 as polio, corona and provide vaccines free of cost. To illustrate, in India, after inventing the corona vaccine, authority serves
people
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 for free,
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, the government can control
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 rampant on facilitating way.
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, political parties should update the latest technology for
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;
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, folks would not suffer and die to lack of
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.
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, investing huge amounts for medical equipment and free
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 directly gave an impact on the economy,
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 prices of taxes enhance indirectly because authority
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 wants money from citizens to give a higher level of health care. To conclude, health is a mandatory need for every human being. In my opinion, the government have to spend a large amount on the vaccine and free
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, which helps to a poor citizen.
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, there is
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 some darker side to
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 phenomenon but we can neglect
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