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Write about the following topic: The young can get easily influenced by the internet. What could be the reasons for this? What can be done to exercise more control over their use of the internet. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. Your Answer

#topic #internet #exercise #control
These days the
internet
 is the necessity of the
time
 . The world will stop without the
internet
 because almost no organization cannot work without
this
 . Even the students ,
youngsters
 are using the
internet
 in their daily lives. I agreed with
this
 ,that today
youngsters
 are easily influenced by the
internet
. There are so many reasons that we can consider that young get easily attracted by the
internet
 . To commence with children from their childhood they already introduce with
internet
 by
parents
 and
then
 by schools and they take it as the easy way to keep them busy and entertain . Because there are so many ways to entertain them on the
internet
 like games ,social media, movies those are easily accessible just by one click.
Furthermore
, Nowadays
parents
 are busy with their own schedule they don't have
time
 to spend with their children even for their homework from school so they
also
 support the
internet
 so the youngster can find their solutions through the
internet
 . It is the need of
time
 to control
this
 issue and it is the responsibility of both teachers and
parents
. they can introduce other ways of study like promote library
instead
 of e-books and
parents
 can spend more
time
 with them like outings and other activities . As
youngsters
 are vulnerable they can get easily under bad influences by social media or any other websites .So , it can be solved by regular checks on their activities on the
internet
. In the
,
Remove the comma
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end I would say excess of everything is bad and there should be a limit for
youngsters
 for the use of the
internet
 and it should be on regularly check by elders .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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