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Counties are becoming more and more similar because people are able to but the same product anywhere in the world do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#counties #people #product #world #development
Now a days
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 countries
are seems
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 to be alike because of the global
products
. we can buy the
products
 of any country very easily .
However
, I completely oppose
this
 trend since
,
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 it shows a harsh impact on our society. As we see, due to the
easily
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 availability of worldwide goods, nations are
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losing
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loosing
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 their cultural values of
products
. Because of
this
 trade, our province richness and art crafts are concealed.
Moreover
, what would we tell our future generation about our cultural values of the goods which produced in our nation and we are running behind the other brands which are looking fascinating and increase the economic growth of theirs
instead
 of our nations.
for instance
, like in Turkish , if they not serve their
specialty
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 tea Kawha in their traditional tea barks.
nevertheless
, every kingdom has its own cultural
products
, their significance should not be lost.
Furthermore
, let us not forgot that the medicines, toys, clothes everything belongs to
local
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craftsman
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 of our nation. Because of worldwide goods easily accessible to
the
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every country so, our local craftsman
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loosing
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 their job . The old school craftsman
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ae
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 not recognized by their own kingdom .
such
 as, due to the entry of the supermarkets, the regional grocery stores, garments shops like others all are shuttered badly .Their daily bread and butter
is
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 snatched by these markets where we can get all the nationwide
products
in
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 one roof. As a consequence, by all
this
 we
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ae
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 promoting other nations economic growth
instead
 of
own
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 . To conclude, if international brands take over
the
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each
others
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 nation, one day our cultural heritage will be invisible. Local
products
 suits to
local
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the local
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 community. We should not rush for
the
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international things. Now it's
demand
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 of the hour , every citizen should wake up and promotes their local business.
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