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Some people believe that foreign visitors should be charge more han local people when they visit cultural and historical attraction in a country . to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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In the ultra-modern epoch , it is a point of debate that foreign visitors should
be pay
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 more than
local
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the local
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 community
for
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to
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 visit the historical and cultural
place
 .As tourist
attraction
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attractions
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 are part of a country's
economy
 .
This
 essay will discuss that
this
 perspective is right. The
first
 and foremost reason to support my ideology is that
,
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outside tourists get more facilities and services as compared to local
people
.
In addition
 , due to
language
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barrier
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 they do not understand the ideal value of that
perticular
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particular
place
 so they higher guide and it
result
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into
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in
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 more cost budget For foreign
people
 . Well, in local
people
 they are already known about
place
 and
as a
result
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 they do not
needed
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 to be charged for them . Generally, it is worth
to
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saying
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 that most
of
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apply
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the business
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business
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businesses
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 around the historical and cultural
place
 are run by the tourist
economy
.
Furtheremore
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Furthermore
,
maintainance
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maintenance
 and service of that
place
also
 cover by the tourist
economy
 . On the one hand , if authorities take
same
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 charge from native the number of visitors decrease in future .
Moreover
,
government
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also
 help to historical
place
 so
economy
get
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boost
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 .
For example
, as per USA research in 2015
singapore
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Singapore
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 earn 250 million from visitors . Having gone through the matter in some
detailed
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 it can
be conclude
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 that , it is fair to charge more money from foreigners than local
people
 . The government should
be give
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 more services and facilities to the local
people
.
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