Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

A group of individuals present the view that painters, musicians and other innovative

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in general, should be sponsored by the

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.

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, there is another group that

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other possible financial sources should be considered to support

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artists

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. I strongly agree with the former opinion. On the one hand, some people justifiably argue that

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is responsible for protecting cultural heritage by means of supporting the arts. Artworks are tightly bonded to the culture and history of any country, whereas the

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is the one who is responsible for keeping the culture alive for the

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generations.

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, when the

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grant funds to a painter who is interested in illustrating historical monuments, more paintings will be drawn and

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result

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more people will have a chance to become familiar with their country’s historical background.

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, another group of people claim that governments must allocate budgets to other vital areas in society. They insist financial support must be dedicated to the other critical fields that are more essential than

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as healthcare infrastructures or educational needs in deprived areas.

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, I do not find

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argument convincing as by sponsoring talented

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, there is a good chance that the

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can

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have financial gain eventually.

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, when a skilled musician is supported to have performance, the

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can have financial gains from selling tickets as well and if needed,

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money can be invested in other essential parts

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society. To conclude, in my view,

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is the

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’s duty to grant fundings to creative

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as arts play a key role in the protection of cultural heritage and

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protection is the

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’s duty.

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, the investment in more critical parts of society can be done by the benefits gained

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of supporting

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.