Some artistic places
such
as galleries and
museums
request a
fee
entrance
whereas others do not charge any admission
fee
. Certainly, there are positive sides as well as downsides,
however
, in my
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there are more negative developments if these
institutions
allow
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entrance
.
To begin
with, some benefits are possible to be seen once free
entrance
is permitted. One of them is that
this
trend may incentive
people
visiting
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centre more frequent. It is a way to create a more engaged population towards
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profession. In Europe,
for instance
,
people
are extremely involved with historical and traditional
museums
. It is because they learnt how to admire these
institutions
by going there.
Additionally
, more schools could take their students to
museums
and lesson them about its importance and its careers perspectives. It is
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regard that educational
institutions
ought to show to teenagers.
On the contrary
, there are evident negative developments as a consequence of
this
feeless
entrance
.
Firstly
, they disincentive good payments for artists, because their income mostly come
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museums
and galleries visits.
Therefore
, if the
entrance
is free, the artist work,
such
as paints or sculptures, are not being valued properly.
Furthermore
, every institution needs money to maintain
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infrastructure. They need to keep the
place
tidy, organised and
also
, pay their employees. It is impossible to have a well-
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country where citizens value artists work without paying any
fee
. It is a way to educate
people
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to deliver the right value for a
place
and the other’s job.
In conclusion, it is debatable whether artistic
institutions
should request an
entrance
fee
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because positive and negative sides have their own merits.
Although
, I defend that disadvantages outweigh the benefits. It is because nobody works for free and a
place
needs the money to maintain its infrastructure. Even though the attitude of free charge might bring a positive incentive to
people
, they will not really give the right value for the
place
nor for the work.