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giving children and adolescents pocket mkney is common throughout the world. discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this practice and give your own opinion.

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It has become very common these days that
parents
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 give cash to their
children
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 to keep with them for their daily needs. There are some benefits and drawbacks associated with
this
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 trend. I, personally,
beleive
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believe
 that
this
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 culture tends to bring more positive results. Giving pocket
money
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 to teenagers is considered to put
negative
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a negative
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 effect on them due to certain reasons.
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 of all,
availability
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the availability
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 of
money
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 in excess as compared to their needs would make juveniles to get indulge in bad habits
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 as drugs.
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, the results from the survey in India revealed that about 70
percent
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per cent
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 of youngsters arrested in drug rackets belong to rich families.
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, giving
money
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 to
children
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 make them to
loose
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lose
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focus
fcous
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their fcous
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 from their studies and start doing show-off their status in a society which is not a good
ettiquette
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etiquette
.
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,
this
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 trend can be a reason for peer pressure among
children
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 as some poor
parents
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 cannot afford to give
money
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 to their
children
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.
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 leads to
feel
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feeling
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 those poor adolescents inferior
than
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to
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 others.
However
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, there
are
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is
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number
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a number
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 of aspects
which
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that
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 prove that pocket
money
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 should be given to
children
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. The
first
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 and foremost reason is that it helps to develop a sense of responsibility among
children
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 from
young
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a young
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 age. Youngsters learn to save
money
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 by limiting their needs.
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 to
this
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,
children
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 can buy things when they need
according
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them according
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 to their own taste. They will be able to take their decisions on their own without any kind of interference
of
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from
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 their
parents
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 as most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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teenagers do not like these days that
parents
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 interfere in their life.
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, it has been seen that most of the bank employees learned to handle cash and
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money saving
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in
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at
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 a very young age. To conclude, by analyzing
aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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 aspects, I
reiiterate
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reiterate
reiterated
 that pocket
money
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 should be given to teenagers as it
make
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makes
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 them more responsible, helps to develop others morals in them and bring more productive outcomes as compared to its disadvantages.

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