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In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing, or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? disagree?

Using
animals
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different sources has become more common.
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, Preservation of
animals
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 must be done. I agree with
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 statement as the animal population has been decreasing but there are some uses with
animals
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 in research.
Firstly
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, In
this
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contemperory
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contemporary
 era, technology has been developing in everyday life.
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Moreover
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 new innovations are taking place. So, usage of
animals
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 can be decreased because many
animals
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 are undergoing
to
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extinction. Many
animals
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 are used for clothing and making different accessories
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 as leather bags have higher demand. New methods should be developed to replace the use of animal skin.
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, in recent times many studies
has
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 done to decrease the use of animal skin and
still
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 research is going on.
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 restaurant has developed where the
food
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 developed in the lab is served as it contains
similar
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a similar
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 taste of chicken is a great innovation.
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, Researches should be continued to reduce the use of
animals
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. If not in the future there will be no
animals
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 where
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environmental destruction will be
occured
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occurred
 as there
also
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 a part of
this
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 earth.
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,
Many
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many
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animals
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 are used as
food
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 as well as in medicine.
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, Most of the
animals
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 are used in research in which the drug or vaccine should be tried on rats in the clinical stages and
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 it is released into the market if not
lot
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a lot
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 of human loss occurs.
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this
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,
animals
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 are
also
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 used as
a
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apply
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food
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to
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by
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 many human beings. To illustrate, Protein which is present in chicken breast and egg is 2 times more than the dals or any other
food
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 items.
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,
Animals
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 usage can be used in various ways but it should not
extent
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. To sum up,
Conservation
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the Conservation
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 of
animals
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 is
indispensory
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dispensary
 and it is
obligation
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an obligation
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 to our humans
alog
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along
 with
this
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animals
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 should be used in a particular way that should be checked.

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