Some students who perform badly at school go on to have very successful lives as adults. What qualities are needed to do well at school? Are these the same qualities that help people succeed later in life?

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success

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influential factors to outperform others in

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. These qualities

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in perform and take control of

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of an individual which will be discussed in upcoming paragraphs.

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important quality which guides

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our goals ,which is often determined

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, is

discipline

. Most individuals put

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to achieve goals but few of them gets what they want .These few achievers maintain

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throughout the process ,which in turn makes them work hard , save time and help them remain focused .

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helps in achieving goals .

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success

is always full of thorns ,difficulties and failures . some people leave the task in

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mid way

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but people with

perseverance

often rise high and outperform others .

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, Elon Musk,One of the richest

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people

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on Earth failed so many times but showed great

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and today, he is one of the richest and successful

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in the world. It can

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that

hard-work

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discipline

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really helps in achieving

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