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Some students who perform badly at school go on to have very successful lives as adults. What qualities are needed to do well at school? Are these the same qualities that help people succeed later in life?

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It is often believed that school performance
determine
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success
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 in life but
success
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 in life depends on continuous hard work and
perseverance
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 . Hard work,
discipline
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are
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most
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 influential factors to outperform others in
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 . These qualities
also
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helps
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 in perform and take control of
life
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 of an individual which will be discussed in upcoming paragraphs.
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 important quality which guides
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our goals ,which is often determined
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success
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, is
discipline
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 . Most individuals put
efforts
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 to achieve goals but few of them gets what they want .These few achievers maintain
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 throughout the process ,which in turn makes them work hard , save time and help them remain focused .
Perseverance
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 is the quality
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 helps in achieving goals .
Path
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 to
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 is always full of thorns ,difficulties and failures . some people leave the task in
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mid way
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 but people with
perseverance
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 often rise high and outperform others .
For ex
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, Elon Musk,One of the richest
person
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people
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 on Earth failed so many times but showed great
perseverance
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 and today, he is one of the richest and successful
entrepreneur
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 in the world. It can
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 that
hard-work
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hard work
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,
discipline
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 and
perseverance
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 are the qualities
which
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that
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 really helps in achieving
success
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 .

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