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Some students who perform badly at school go on to have very successful lives as adults. What qualities are needed to do well at school? Are these the same qualities that help people succeed later in life?

#students #school #lives #adults #qualities #people #life
It is often believed that school performance
determine
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success
 in life but
success
 in life depends on continuous hard work and
perseverance
 . Hard work,
discipline
are
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most
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 influential factors to outperform others in
school
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the school
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 . These qualities
also
helps
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 in perform and take control of
life
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the life
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 of an individual which will be discussed in upcoming paragraphs.
Most
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 important quality which guides
to
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our goals ,which is often determined
success
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, is
discipline
 . Most individuals put
efforts
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 to achieve goals but few of them gets what they want .These few achievers maintain
discipline
 throughout the process ,which in turn makes them work hard , save time and help them remain focused .
Perseverance
 is the quality
which
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 helps in achieving goals .
Path
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 to
success
 is always full of thorns ,difficulties and failures . some people leave the task in
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mid way
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 but people with
perseverance
 often rise high and outperform others .
For ex
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, Elon Musk,One of the richest
person
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people
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 on Earth failed so many times but showed great
perseverance
 and today, he is one of the richest and successful
entrepreneur
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 in the world. It can
concluded
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 that
hard-work
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hard work
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,
discipline
 and
perseverance
 are the qualities
which
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that
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 really helps in achieving
success
 .
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