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Education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In many countries, a certain portion of adults
are
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 illiterate, which means they do not have the basic ability to read or write.
However
,
education
 for these
people
 is quite limited and governments tend to give priority to the
education
 of children and young
people
. In my opinion, educating adults and reducing the illiteracy rate should
also
 be emphasized.
Firstly
, learning to read and write can improve adults’ well-being and make their lives more convenient. Some illiterate
people
 struggle to live a normal life as they may have difficulty in reading the menu and bus schedule. For some reason, they do not receive proper
education
 at a young age and later
on
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 they are paying a price for
this
. If the government could provide some
education
 programs for
this
 group of citizens, life would be much easier for them.
Moreover
, raising the literacy rate can increase
people
’s employability and produce more qualified workers for society. Most
of
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people
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 with low literacy rely on the government’s welfare or do some low-paid work.
Education
 will enhance their competitiveness in the job market, making them competent in challenging jobs with higher pay.
This
 is
also
 beneficial to society, as educated
people
 can make
greater
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contribution
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 with their knowledge and skills. Unfortunately, adults’
education
 does not receive as much attention as children’s
education
 in many parts of the world.
This
 is mainly because the issue of adult illiteracy is often ignored by the government and
public
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. The purpose of school
education
 is to give young
people
 a bright prospect and make them better serve society, and for those adults whose schooling is not complete, the government should offer them equal support.
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  • literacy programs
  • functional illiteracy
  • social mobility
  • inter-generational poverty
  • workforce development
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