Education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, a certain portion of adults

are

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illiterate, which means they do not have the basic ability to read or write.

However

,

education

for these

people

is quite limited and governments tend to give priority to the

education

of children and young

people

. In my opinion, educating adults and reducing the illiteracy rate should

also

be emphasized.

Firstly

, learning to read and write can improve adults’ well-being and make their lives more convenient. Some illiterate

people

struggle to live a normal life as they may have difficulty in reading the menu and bus schedule. For some reason, they do not receive proper

education

at a young age and later

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they are paying a price for

this

. If the government could provide some

education

programs for

this

group of citizens, life would be much easier for them.

Moreover

, raising the literacy rate can increase

people

’s employability and produce more qualified workers for society. Most

of

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people

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with low literacy rely on the government’s welfare or do some low-paid work.

Education

will enhance their competitiveness in the job market, making them competent in challenging jobs with higher pay.

This

is

also

beneficial to society, as educated

people

can make

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contribution

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with their knowledge and skills. Unfortunately, adults’

education

does not receive as much attention as children’s

education

in many parts of the world.

This

is mainly because the issue of adult illiteracy is often ignored by the government and

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. The purpose of school

education

is to give young

people

a bright prospect and make them better serve society, and for those adults whose schooling is not complete, the government should offer them equal support.