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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 modern society, a tremendous advancement is manifested in all sectors due to
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technology. There will be a vast majority of autopilot
vehicles
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 be seen in upcoming years. There are both advantages and disadvantages of driverless
vehicles
 and
this
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 the points. To commence with, there are certain kinds of demerits that can arise due to the driverless modes of transportation. The foremost one, tones of drivers will be jobless that would
leads
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 to unemployment in nations.
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 majority of
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are indulge
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with
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driving
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sector
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such
 as buses, trucks and taxies, if there are autopilot
vehicles
 in future
as a result
 of advancement they will definitely
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loose
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 their jobs. Another convincing factor to ascertain that, in most traffic areas these
vehicles
 will be dangerous as they can cause
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huge accidents on the road due to the traffic and some technical fault in that kind of
modes
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.
However
, automatic transport will help to overcome
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traffic related
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incident
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.
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, automatic transport will not be in rush to reach its destination like human beings. To sum up, it is clear that autopilot
vehicles
 would bring merits whereas, the disadvantages are
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 considerable factor that
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 to be addressed as it will increase the employment rate. The employment rate and unemployment rate are the two essential aspects in the growth of
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 of any nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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