Some people think traveling abroad is necessary, while others think its is not necessary because TV and the internet can give the same information. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It appears that you have an unnecessary comma after the subordinating conjunction Although. Consider removing the comma.
It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.
It seems that article use may be incorrect here.
The adjective another appears to be modifying the plural noun nations. Consider replacing it with the adjective other.
The plural form of be are does not seem to agree with the singular subject huge amount. Consider changing the verb form.
The noun phrase huge amount seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.
The spelling of traveling is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.
The spelling of traveling is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.
The spelling of traveling is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.
It appears that you have an unnecessary comma after the subordinating conjunction that. Consider removing the comma.
The word leaners doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.
The verb deepens does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.
The noun phrase huge amount seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.
The noun phrase different area seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.
It seems that area may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.
It seems that shop may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.
The word leaning doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.
It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.
The word vary doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.
The word vary doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.
The spelling of traveling is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.
The verb provides after the modal verb could does not appear to be in the correct form. Consider changing the verb form.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite