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Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent, do you agree with this statement?

#trend #alternative #forms #medicine #methods
Now-a-days
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Nowadays
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,
use
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the use
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 of other types of
medicines
 rather than
allopathy
 has
became
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become
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 a trend
which
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that
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 may be not much effective but can
also
 bring us detrimental effects.
However
, I believe that using other forms have both advantages and disadvantages which will be discussed in
this
 essay.
First
 of all, In
this
 contemporary era, Many new
type
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types
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 of diseases are developing day by day. so, to
cure
 those diseases new forms of medicinal methods are improving
such
 as
homeopathy
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homoeopathy
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, ayurvedic, acupressure and many more. These
type
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types
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 of treatments
are already existed
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already exist
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 but as
allopathy
 can'
t
cure
 few problems
then
people
 are mostly
intrested
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interested
 to follow these
type
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types
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 of
techniques
.
For instance
, At present in most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
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,people
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 Diabetes and Hypertension
has
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have
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became
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become
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 common. Many
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
 are taking lots of Allopathic
medicines
 which has no
cure
 but rather than that these conditions are worsening daily as they can'
t
 be controlled because of our daily habits.
However
, at
this
rate
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,rate
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 many
people
 are showing interest
towards
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in
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homeopathy
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homoeopathy
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 and ayurvedic as they have few better results and it
also
 improved the lifestyle.
Secondly
, Some
people
doesn'
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don't
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t
 show interest
towards
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in
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medicines
 because there are lots of
sideeffects
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side effects
side-effects
.
However
, they prefer these alternative
medicines
 to avoid
such
 adverse effects of drugs.
Moreover
, we can'
t
 say that
allopathy
 is
safer
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the safer
a safer
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 way because it has
it's
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its
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 disadvantages too.
It's
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Its
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cure
 rate is fast when compared to
remaining
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the remaining
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techniques
. While using
allopathy
, the death rates are
also
 more than other methods.
For instance
, In
this
pandemic
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,pandemic
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allopathy
 has 50-50 chances. 50%
people
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of people
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was
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were
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 cured but
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the other
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other
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another
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 half of the
people
 died.
Similary
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Similarly
Similar
, allopathic
medicines
has
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have
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 no definite
cure
 in all cases.
However
,
major
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the major
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 advantage is that symptoms can be cured faster but they can be relapsed.
Consequently
, in other
techniques
 symptoms may be cured slowly but
relapse
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the relapse
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 rate is less. In conclusion,
Usage
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the Usage
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 of other medicinal
techniques
 can
also
 be practised as they have many benefits. Every
type
 has
their
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its
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 own drawbacks but the preference
depens
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depends
depend
 upon the personality of the individual that they need to face any situation. In
this
 essay,
i
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I
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 have discussed both positives and negatives of all medical
techniques
.
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