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Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent, do you agree with this statement?

#trend #alternative #forms #medicine #methods
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Now-a-days
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Nowadays
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,
use
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the use
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 of other types of
medicines
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 rather than
allopathy
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 has
became
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 a trend
which
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 may be not much effective but can
also
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 bring us detrimental effects.
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, I believe that using other forms have both advantages and disadvantages which will be discussed in
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 of all, In
this
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 contemporary era, Many new
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type
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types
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 of diseases are developing day by day. so, to
cure
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 those diseases new forms of medicinal methods are improving
such
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 as
homeopathy
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homoeopathy
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, ayurvedic, acupressure and many more. These
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type
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types
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 of treatments
are already existed
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already exist
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 but as
allopathy
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 can'
t
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cure
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 few problems
then
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people
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 are mostly
intrested
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interested
 to follow these
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type
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types
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 of
techniques
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.
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, At present in most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
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,people
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 Diabetes and Hypertension
has
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became
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become
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 common. Many
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
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 are taking lots of Allopathic
medicines
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 which has no
cure
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 but rather than that these conditions are worsening daily as they can'
t
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 be controlled because of our daily habits.
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, at
this
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rate
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,rate
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 many
people
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 are showing interest
towards
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in
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homeopathy
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homoeopathy
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 and ayurvedic as they have few better results and it
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 improved the lifestyle.
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, Some
people
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doesn'
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don't
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t
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towards
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in
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medicines
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 because there are lots of
sideeffects
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side effects
side-effects
.
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, they prefer these alternative
medicines
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 to avoid
such
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 adverse effects of drugs.
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, we can'
t
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 say that
allopathy
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 is
safer
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the safer
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 way because it has
it's
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its
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 disadvantages too.
It's
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cure
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 rate is fast when compared to
remaining
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the remaining
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techniques
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. While using
allopathy
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, the death rates are
also
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 more than other methods.
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, In
this
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pandemic
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,pandemic
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allopathy
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 has 50-50 chances. 50%
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people
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of people
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was
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were
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 cured but
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the other
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other
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another
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 half of the
people
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 died.
Similary
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Similarly
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, allopathic
medicines
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has
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 no definite
cure
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 in all cases.
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,
major
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the major
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 advantage is that symptoms can be cured faster but they can be relapsed.
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, in other
techniques
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 symptoms may be cured slowly but
relapse
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the relapse
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 rate is less. In conclusion,
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 of other medicinal
techniques
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 can
also
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 be practised as they have many benefits. Every
type
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 has
their
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its
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 own drawbacks but the preference
depens
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depends
depend
 upon the personality of the individual that they need to face any situation. In
this
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i
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 have discussed both positives and negatives of all medical
techniques
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.
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