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The best way to resolve the international environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that one of the most effective ways that alleviate environmental issues is raising the prices of
fuel
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. While I agree that
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 method would contribute to improving the environment, there are
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 many other ways to protect our Earth. There are some tangible benefits when governments increase the
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 cost.
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, when the price of
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 becomes exorbitantly high,
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 leads to a reduction in using cars or motorbikes.
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, a large amount of exhaust emission
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 the main factor causing climate changes over the world is reduced.
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, Raising the
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 cost may encourage the use of renewable
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 of
energy
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. Fossil fuels take a thousand years to form, but they are quickly exhausted, poisonous and polluting. Whereas, alternative
energy
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sources
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 are boundless and eco-friendly.
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, These attempts are not enough to solve all serious environmental problems. The most important way is that national authorities should enact stricter laws on exploiting and using fossil fuels and allocate more resources to develop new renewable
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 resources. Today, there are still few experiments on developing alternative
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sources
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 and these renewable
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 of
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 are not widely used by people in all their daily lives.
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, all nations over the world should cooperate, share knowledge with each other and achieve sustainable developments. Governments
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 should take into consideration marine conservations, the prevention of forest destructions, and lessening the deserted area. In conclusion,
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 rising
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 prices is a good approach to solve environmental issues, many other ways need to carry out simultaneously to save our environment
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