Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People
have different views about whether apartment buildings should be allowed to build around the city
center
Change the spelling
centre
instead
of having parks
and gardens
as
to reduce travelling time to go to work. While building apartment close to the Change preposition
apply
city
center
is beneficial, I believe it is more important to have Change the spelling
centre
parks
and gardens
near the city
center
.
On the one hand, having apartments around the Change the spelling
centre
center
of the town is good for Change the spelling
centre
people
who work in the city
because they can save travelling time. Apart from that, people
live
near the Correct pronoun usage
who live
city
may not need to drive or take a bus to the workplace as so can save money in
transportation. Change preposition
on
In addition
, it is benefit
for the around stores or commercial activities development. Add an article
a benefit
Last
but not least, live near the workplace can reduce stress. For example
: they do not need to wake up too early or rush
themselves in order to Correct your spelling
push
caught
the bus.
Change the verb
catch
On the other hand
, it is perhaps even more important to have gardens
and parks
near the city
center
. Change the spelling
centre
Gardens
and parks
are good
Add an article
a good
place
for Change the noun form
places
people
to chill out and unwind their mind
especially nowadays Fix the agreement mistake
minds
people
under different
Change the article
a different
kind
of pressure. Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
Also
, parks
and gardens
can remove a wide variety of city
center
pollutants from the air because Change the spelling
centre
of
trees exist. It is no doubt that Change preposition
apply
gardens
and parks
are places where people
are able to make connections, meet new friends and participate in recreational activities in order to promoting
community wellness. As for parents, it is crucial for kids to have a place to play outside and it is free.
In conclusion, I can understand why Change the verb
promote
people
might want to have more apartments near the city
, but it seems to me that having gardens
and parks
are much more desirable in the long-term goal.Submitted by chrissywuwu on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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