A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for research. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Many individuals hold firmly to
belief
that Add an article
the belief
animals
are utilise
by humans and not evaluated as Change the verb form
are utilised
an
emotional Correct article usage
apply
creature
to have rights. Fix the agreement mistake
creatures
In
the other Change preposition
On
hand
there are many Add a comma
,hand
people
claimed
that Correct pronoun usage
who claimed
animals
can use for different purposes such
as scientific stic research. In my opinion, I believe that creatures other than humans can have equal rights as a
living Correct article usage
apply
soul
.
Fix the agreement mistake
souls
First
and foremost, I totally agree that animals
deserve evaluating
like an individual and should not use for individuals pleasure. There are many species in zoos just holding for to entertain the Replace the word
evaluation
people
even Correct your spelling
though
tough
their nature is not suitable for some occasions. Correct your spelling
though
For example
, a polar bear are
diagnosed Change the verb form
is
as
Change preposition
with
depression
due to high temperatures Replace the word
depressed
reture
in Argentina. In fact, the main Correct your spelling
return
retire
reson
behind that Correct your spelling
reason
this
creature
Replace the word
creative
force
to live in different conditions than his nature. Change the form of the verb
forced
People
should not have to right to capture and exhibit another
emotional living things for their own pleasure.
Correct quantifier usage
other
In
the other hand, nobody can contest that using Change preposition
On
animals
to
Change preposition
for to
purpose
of scientific research contribute Add an article
the purpose
our
society significantly. Pharmaceutical companies generally blamed for using Change preposition
to our
animals
for their products however
it is fact that our progress in medicine depend
on Change the verb form
depends
these
researches. There are many Correct determiner usage
this
people
with severe diseases ases still waiting for a cure for their agonies. For example
, gene therapy is an
only remedy for some muscle disorders and Correct article usage
the
reserches
still ongoing to find another solution that's why experiments need to continue even Correct your spelling
researchers
researches
tough
consisting Correct your spelling
though
animal
usage. Change preposition
of animal
On the other
hand
there are many potential Add a comma
,hand
area
to minimize utilisation of Change to a plural noun
areas
animal
as Add an article
the animal
guinea
pig and Add an article
a guinea
the guinea
this
situation have
to improve by these corporations and of course regulation Change the verb form
has
by laws
.
In conclusion, it is obvious that Correct your spelling
bylaws
animals
are seen as an emotional creatures
like human beings and have equal rights prevent to exploit them. Correct the article-noun agreement
emotional creatures
an emotional creature
However
the contribution to our society of using Add a comma
,However
animals
in research activities es is undeniable while actions must be taken to prevent and reduce using living things for only our species sake.Submitted by gorkemozzeytin on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite