A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for research. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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that
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by humans and not evaluated as
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to have rights.
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that
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and foremost, I totally agree that
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like an individual and should not use for individuals pleasure. There are many species in zoos just holding for to entertain the
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their nature is not suitable for some occasions.
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creature
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to live in different conditions than his nature.
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should not have to right to capture and exhibit
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emotional living things for their own pleasure.
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the other hand, nobody can contest that using
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purpose
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of scientific research contribute
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society significantly. Pharmaceutical companies generally blamed for using
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for their products
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it is fact that our progress in medicine
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on
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researches. There are many
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with severe diseases ases still waiting for a cure for their agonies.
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only remedy for some muscle disorders and
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still ongoing to find another solution that's why experiments need to continue even
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consisting
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usage.
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hand
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there are many potential
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to minimize utilisation of
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the animal
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as
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a guinea
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pig and
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to improve by these corporations and of course regulation
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. In conclusion, it is obvious that
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are seen as
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like human beings and have equal rights prevent to exploit them.
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the contribution to our society of using
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in research activities es is undeniable while actions must be taken to prevent and reduce using living things for only our species sake.
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