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Some people say that economic development is necessary to reduce poverty in the world others say that economic growth should be stops as it damages the environment. discuss both views

#people #development #poverty #world #growth #damages #environment
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 number of
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 who seem that economic enhancement needs for removing poorness from
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 earth. Others think that financial enrichment denotes to increase in industrial activities
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, the
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 ecosystem has been destroying it day by day. For
people
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 of the
world
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, we have to ensure employment as well as a green
world
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 which will be ensured a healthy and peaceful life. There are so many
people
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 live in
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world
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 at the poverty level which is a really alarming situation for
world
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 leaders. A
country
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 's government try to increase their economic growth through industrial development where they can create huge employment. Most of the
country
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's leaders believe that without industrial development, it is impossible to enrich the GDP of the
country
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. So, the government of the
country
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 always focuses on the business
environment
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 and rulers of the
countries
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 patronize the businessman for doing business without any intercept. The
world
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 economist said that a
country
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's industrial enrichment ensure to reduce the unemployment problem as well as directly contribute to domestic economic development.
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, a
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's environmental sustainability is more important to ensure a healthy lifestyle. Most of the regions in
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world
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, don't give importance to their
environment
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 as a
result
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 Strome and weather system seriously hamper. Developed
countries
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 continuously have been polluted air, for
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 reason,
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 reason developing
countries
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 have been affected seriously by environmental Strome. In developing ,
countries
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people
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's life is being destroyed by the envirnemal heavy Strome. earth
environment
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 specialists predict that gradual industrial air pollution will fall in our
environment
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 in a dangerous situation after that we could not recover our environmental naturality which is needed for a healthy and peaceful life for the new generation. In conclusion, I think that economic progress and a safe
environment
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 both are vital for human beings, so we have to find alternative ways that will ensure both sides at a time.
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