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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, the
extinction
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 of
plants
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 and
animals
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 is an environmental issue that has increased with time. But some
people
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 believe that environmental problems are not more important than other
world
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 issues.
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 essay will discuss these different opinions about environmental concerns. Taking into account my opinion over the alarms increased of species in
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 danger around the
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.
Firstly
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, the current
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 required a huge quantity of natural resources to satisfied the big product demand from human society, many of these products are from
animals
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 and
plants
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 origin. Mainly, the
food
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 industry has a big impact on climate change due to the use of meat products and
plants
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 products. All these
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 have to produce a huge amount of processed
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 to feed the whole
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,
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 problem increased the hunting industry inside the sea
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 over the land.
As a result
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, many
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 have been extinct or on the border of
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such
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 as the capibara in south America.
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, some groups of
people
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 are not concerned about animal and
plants
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extinction
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. Because they do not feel affected by the lack of some species due to these persons live in big city areas, they are not worried about the dangers of some species and they just need is
food
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 and clothes without been notified of the source of the
food
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 or product. One good example is tourism, the
people
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 just want to enjoy every place that they visited, more often these
industries
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 create more pollution and garbage because they live to feed many
people
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, and someplace use animal which the main attraction for tourists. In conclusion, companies are more worried about earning money and they are not concerned about the way to find
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 money,
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 some
people
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 live in comfortable houses that are separate from the real problem in other parts of the
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. I firmly believe that
industries
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 must be more concerned about the impact of their process in the environmental sector and they have to eliminate the use of
animals
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 and
plants
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 in
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 danger to earn more money in their pockets.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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