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Parents should encourage children to spend less time studying and more time doing physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

An international
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event
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 is a good point for improving the international relations between countries. With
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 agree, but there are others, which think vice versa. Some nationalities believe that an international
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 is something good, but
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hosting an international
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 ones are more important and have a
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 ob benefices. On the one hand,
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 can increase
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tourism and the economic situation in the country.
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 it will help the private sector like restaurants and hotels to gain international clients.
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, to attend a European football match in Italy,
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 over the world came to Italy. It was a huge expense and the territory was populated. Unfortunately, there are
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 who are not in agreement with these opinions. They think that
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 to organise an international
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 it cost a lot of money and no guarantee that
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 money will be riched back.
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 coming
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 from different countries will make that local authority will lose control and it will turn into chaos and damages.
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, if the majority from abroad are fans of a
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 team that lose the game, they can be able to ravage and act badly to destroy the countries goods. In conclusion, I believe that both parties have a logical reason to agree or disagree that hosting an international
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event
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 because nothing can be visible. I would like to advise that the authorities do not reject the idea of every international
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, but to do their best to organise it and take all measures needed for protecting local
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 and the country.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Development
  • Concentration
  • Obesity
  • Burnout
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Healthy lifestyle
  • Intellectual development
  • Structured activities
  • Teamwork
  • Leadership
  • Sedentary behavior
  • Tech addiction
  • Role models
  • Family bonds
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