Parents should encourage children to spend less time studying and more time doing physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

An international
sports
event
is a good point for improving the international relations between countries. With
this
,idea some
people
agree, but there are others, which think vice versa. Some nationalities believe that an international
event
is something good, but
to
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hosting an international
sports
ones are more important and have a
lot
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ob benefices. On the one hand,
this
event
can increase
the
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tourism and the economic situation in the country.
On the other
hand
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it will help the private sector like restaurants and hotels to gain international clients.
For instance
, to attend a European football match in Italy,
people
over the world came to Italy. It was a huge expense and the territory was populated. Unfortunately, there are
people
who are not in agreement with these opinions. They think that
,
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to organise an international
sports
event
it cost a lot of money and no guarantee that
this
money will be riched back.
Also
, they explain that
,
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coming
people
from different countries will make that local authority will lose control and it will turn into chaos and damages.
For example
, if the majority from abroad are fans of a
sports
team that lose the game, they can be able to ravage and act badly to destroy the countries goods. In conclusion, I believe that both parties have a logical reason to agree or disagree that hosting an international
sports
event
is good for the country
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because nothing can be visible. I would like to advise that the authorities do not reject the idea of every international
event
, but to do their best to organise it and take all measures needed for protecting local
people
and the country.
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