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High job demands, stress and sense of commitment are among the main reasons people go to work when they are ill. This way they accomplish important tasks, but may infect others or get some serious health problems themselves. In your opinion should people go to work if they are sick? Support your point of view with relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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These days Population is increasing
day
 by
day
 and high demand
of
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 jobs and easily available labours so workers go the extra mile and neglect their health problems. People have to do extra effort to remain in
this
 human race so despite they are ill, they go to the office and complete their tasks .
however
, some people believe that they will infect other staff and
also
 create a serious issue for themselves . I completely agree and in
this
 essay, I will support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
, folks should not go to
work
 if they are sick because they can't concentrate on their
work
 and will take more time than ,usually they need .
For example
, If you are not healthy they can't give their best and it will affect their a vital project, as well as company, face some serious financial problems. Employees careers and futures
also
 hang in the balance so it is utterly important to do their job when they are completely fit. Another reason why I agree with employees should not go to
work
 when they are sick because they will make things worse .
For instance
, they do not take proper rest and take the stress of a job they harm themselves more
also
 they take more medical leave and their hospital bills will be increasing
day
 by
day
, So I STRONGLY BELIEVE THAT
THIS
 IS waste of money and energy ,WHAT IS MORE , people make things worst for their family and themself
also
. IN CONCLUSION, even though a sense of commitment is important for a career and we
also
 should
work
 hard, I believe health is more important than a job so we should prefer health our than jobs.
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