Nowadays more and more people are using cellphones and computers to communicate, so they are losing the ability to communicate with each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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technology and computerization , nowadays folks started talking with each other by means of mobiles and computers and
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weakening
their social behaviour. I partially agree with the above statement and will give my views in the following paragraphs. On the one hand , due to smartphones and many applications in
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it is easier for
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long distance
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sitting people to connect with each other
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Skype and Facebook
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which nowadays many people use for online chatting and calling which makes communication so comfortable and easier.
On the other hand
, though social
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gatherings
and personal meetings reduced a lot with the invention of new means of communication
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that doesn't mean masses lost their connections with each other
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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