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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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According to some
people
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,hosting an international
event
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 is beneficial for a country whereas another section of
people
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 is against organising
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 events. In
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 will discuss
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both of the viewpoints. Undoubtedly, conducting
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 a big
event
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 opens the door for many new opportunities for a nation.
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, it gives
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 to the tourism sector as many sportsmen,media and spectators visit the country for witnessing the competition.They create the memories and wish to come back to that place again. An
event
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 of
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 a scale requires the up-gradation of the infrastructure which gives
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employment to the poor and helps in the
asset building
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 process for a nation.
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,many
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 opine that they are not good for a country. They take away the money which could have been spent on the poor
people
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 who feel it hard to make both
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ends meet.
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,
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the influx
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 of the foreigners may lead to
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 in crime and other security issues. They contend that it is necessary to provide the basic facilities to the
people
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 before organising
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 a lavish
event
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. To conclude,
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 believe that though hosting an international sports
event
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 have its own advantages as well as disadvantages. The rich states should definitely organise
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 events whereas poor countries should invest money
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 providing the basic amenities to their
people
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • infrastructure
  • national pride
  • cultural showcase
  • inspire a generation
  • temporary boost
  • environmental concerns
  • sustainable planning
  • public funds
  • divert resources
  • tourism influx
  • job opportunities
  • sports development
  • public health
  • construction
  • strategic investment
  • global audience
  • hospitality
  • public services
  • cost-benefit analysis
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