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Some school leavers tend to go for travelling or work for a period of time before directly going to university. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages?

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It is often argued that after completing
school
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 education young crowd tend to go for travel or
job
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a job
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 for a particular period of time before taking straight admission to the
university
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. In my ,opinion there are numerous
advantages
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 of working or travelling before going to
university
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. In
this
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 ,essay we will discuss the
advantages
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 and disadvantages of travelling or
work
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 for a certain period of time for institute
leavers
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.
Firstly
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, there are plenty of
advantages
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 that
school
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leavers
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 can take the certain gap, and explore different places, culture, and history by travelling.
Secondly
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, if they
work
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 for a certain period of time they can learn, and find an interest that what exactly they want to do in future. Travelling or
work
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 gives opportunity to young people, that how to live life independently.
This
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 means that some of the
school
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leavers
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 do not know exactly what they want to become in future, or in which field they want to make a career.
For example
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, travelling can help to explore cultures, tradition art and some people find art most interesting after travelling.
However
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, there are some disadvantages like working at the early stage of life might be losing interest in
further
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 studies. Nowadays, It is widely argued that some young people love to hang out and travel
instead
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 of study. If they start working and get a good salary in some field they will not even think about higher education in the
university
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. In conclusion, there are some
advantages
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 that
school
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leavers
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 can take the experience of actual
work
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 before directly going to the
university
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 for higher education,
however
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 some the youngster might not continue the
university
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 study if they lack interest in the study and continue to
work
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • real-world experience
  • personal growth
  • independence
  • responsibility
  • maturity
  • enhanced CV/resume
  • tuition fees
  • student loans
  • academic momentum
  • study habits
  • productive
  • financial risk
  • competitive disadvantage
  • out of sync
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