Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities.Other,however,say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measure are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In today's modern world,
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is a major issue in day-to-day life. People are getting worried about their fitness. Few individuals have believed that
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can be improved by adding
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facilities as a part of our daily routines, while others oppose
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due to its effects.
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essay will argue, what should humans adapt for their better well-being. Advocates of introducing
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have stated that,
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, society has been dealing with hazardous
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issues.
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, due to the advancement of electronic gadgets, human life becomes easy that needs no physical movement.
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, their physical
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had been diminishing.
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, the individual works in a company, his job is to sit on a chair all long day,
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results in less physical movement and
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will lead to many
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issues like obesity, gastrointestinal problems, etc.
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, a sedentary lifestyle is
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the main reason for
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issues. In regards to
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, the government should impose high penalties on high-fat foods. The exercise equipment should be installed in public parks by the council authorities. The public
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indulges themselves in any
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activities
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of their interest, like swimming.
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, few believed that
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introducing fitness machines or
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activities
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it could affect individual
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because some humans don’t know how to select the
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according to their
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it would be affected adversely. To conclude, I strongly admit that the individual should actively participate in any
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fitness program, but under some special guidance or by keeping in mind their
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problems. Along with all, these diets
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play an important role. So along with any physical
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, a balanced diet
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is added.
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