Do you think it is better for students to work before their university studies? Why? Using reasons and specific examples to support your choice

Nowadays, taking ‘a
gap
year
’ is the popular choice for undergraduates who recently graduated from high
school
. A
gap
year
is a
time
between graduation from high
school
and starting at the academy; pupil can make their own decision about what they want to do in their
future
; as well as gain some experience doing something away from
study
. Working is
one
of the popular options for
students
because they can have
time
to think more about themselves by trying various places, not only the subjects at
college
,
also
have more understanding of the value of
money
and learn how to manage their own finances.
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the practical experiences that they learn from their workplaces can not come from any theoretical backgrounds. My essay will focus on reasons with detailed explanations about why
students
should work before starting
university
.
First
of all, working before their
university
studies can help
students
to have the right direction by trying various
jobs
. Actually, the knowledge that we learn at
college
is quite huge and it is certainly different from the
university
programs;
that is
the reason why most
students
feel shocked and are not able to manage their
time
in their
first
year
of
study
.
For example
, many
students
decide to change their majors because they have no motivation to come to class. ,
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because they don’t have enough
time
to think about what they are really interested in for the
future
instead
of trying to get some good marks at
college
.
However
, working is an advantage because
students
have so many opportunities to try various
jobs
such
as becoming baristas, babysitters, nail technicians, etcetera. They have
time
to understand more about the job and if they feel the
jobs
are not suited for them, they can try the new
one
; everything can be available because they are young and they have space to learn. Until finding the
jobs
they are really interested in, they absolutely will have the motivation to get the certifications of their chosen degrees because they can see themselves after 5 years or more.
For instance
, the risk of
students
who take a
gap
year
changing their majors or dropping out of their
first
year
of
university
is significantly less than the risk of
students
who do not take a
gap
year
.
Secondly
, working before their
university
studies
also
can help
students
understand the value of
money
and learn how to manage their own finances.
This
is important because at
this
time
young people have to be independent of their families. The
money
that they earn from full-
time
or part-
time
jobs
can be charged for their higher education;
students
can choose to
study
abroad, which can be quite expensive but at least they can feel more comfortable spending
money
because
that is
the
money
that they earn by themselves, not from their parents or governments. After trying hard to earn their budgets,
students
can learn how to manage their salary
such
as renting houses, preparing meals, vehicle maintenance, etcetera; particularly for
students
who live far away from their families.
For example
, most international
students
in
university
can be good at managing their own
money
because they know the importance of
money
that they earn; they
also
have to face lots of issues when living far from their own families. It incidentally makes them become mature, independent and easily successful in their lives.
Moreover
, practical experiences from workplaces can not be taught at
school
. At the workplace,
students
can be taught by workers, who have plenty of experience from their area of expertise.
Students
have to become active and work in teams; they can understand more responsibilities of the
jobs
and their roles in the teams.
Therefore
their life skills can be improved rapidly in authentic learning conditions. It is much different from
school
,
pupil
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can only learn by theory from the books and lack practical experience; lessons that they learn can be forgotten after having exams.
For instance
, most people say learning by ‘muscle memory’ can
last
longer than learning from books because they completely understand what they are doing and the purpose of doing it;
therefore
, their brains become more active and the memories can
last
longer. Undoubtedly, taking a
gap
year
can make us postpone
study
for
one
year
compared to our
college
friends;
however
, working during a
gap
period brings us a lot of benefits
such
as making the right direction in our lives and learning lots of life skills. The
time
that we spend for the
gap
year
is a chance for young people, it is
also
a big motivation for us to follow our dreams. It is ‘never too late to learn and we should only start to
study
at
university
when we are ready. I believe no
one
in the
future
cares about how quickly we can pass
university
, so please give yourself a chance to think about what you are really interested in and have no regrets for the
future
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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