Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make desicions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

There are those who argue that having personal wishes can lead to

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society in the near future. Opponents of

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part of life, be able to

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regarding intimate issues. In

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essay, I will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter. There is no doubt that appreciating children about their daily choices can lead them to be more independent.

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of people

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to manage their lives in

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way only for them. To be more precise, they do not have enough level of

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others ideas.

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, it makes

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in societies.

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, he can be

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because he will think only about

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convenient

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.

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frame should

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everybody, because it has a crucial role in nowadays society.

On the other hand

, it is extremely important to have own ideas,

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helps individuals be more self-confident and motivated to change their lives. They do not need

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approval from others. And

also

it is easy for parents.

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, if parents work every day, it will be easy if that child

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something

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by himself.

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, parents should be aware

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children actions. In conclusion,

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is

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two sides

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one coin. Having personality is vital, but sometimes people totally forget about others wishes. In my opinion,

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individualism should be in moderation.