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New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#technologies #children #time
It is true that the development of technology
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 had an influence on the activities children choose for their spare time. While I accept that these high techs can sometimes have a positive effect on the user, I believe they are more likely to have a harmful impact. On the one hand, products with new technology,
such
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smartphones
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smart phones
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 or watches and other high-tech devices can be both educational and entertaining. Information is more
approchable
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approachable
 for kids with just a click on the "search"
botton
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, with not only text descriptions but
also
 other formats like pictures or videos to illustrate the ideas. Children are
hence
 transported into a virtual world which is often more exciting and engaging than the well-worn books.
Moreover
, the process of exploring and using these new
technologies
 encourages imagination and creativity, as well as concentration, logical thinking, and
problem solving
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, all of which are useful skills in life.
On the other hand
, devices with new
technologies
 can be highly
addctive
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 because users are constantly given new information and frequent updates. Many users, children
in particular
, now spend hours each day playing games, browsing around social media of all kinds.
This
 type of addiction can have effects ranging from lack of sleep and exercise to problems at school
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 when homework is sacrificed for a few more hours on the phone or computer.
In addition
, the availability of new communication
technologies
such
 as online chatting can
also
 have the result
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 isolating people and discouraging real interaction.
For instance
, many young people choose to make friends online rather than mixing with their peers in the real world, and these "virtual" relationships are a poor substitute for real friendships. In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of new
technologies
 are more significant than the possible
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benefits
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Inappropriate content
  • Self-learning
  • Screen time
  • Social inequality
  • Enhanced communication
  • Creative expression
  • Educational resources
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