Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic?

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Nowadays

junkfood

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junk food

is very common all over the world and all generations love

these

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food

however

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food

incresing

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increasing

their

weights

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and they are facing

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health

issue

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. In

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essay, we will discuss

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the causes of obesity and

also

how to tackle

this

problem

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people

do lots of

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exercise

and their work was connecting to

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physical activities so they did not have any

problem

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disgestion

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digestion

but in

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modern era technology access in every home so that,

people

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depend

on machines.

for instance

, if

people

go to the grocery store and it near to their homes but still they prefer car or bike beside

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. These days

people

are avoiding

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physical work or

exerise

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exercise

that

effect

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their body fat.

Secoundly

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, junk

food

/street

food

is one of the biggest

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why folks suffer from

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obesity.

These

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food

available everywhere and

also

there is lots of

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variety

so youth have so many

choises

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choices

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, according to the report every day one street

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shop

sell

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10000 plates of junk

food

ATHOUGH

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ALTHOUGH

these

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food

is not healthy FOR THEM and thAT cause

food

posioning

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poisoning

AND MANY MORE HEALTH PROBLEMS. To overcome

this

epidemic, society

take

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the extra

miles

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and avoid street or junk

food

. Rise healthy

food

in their diet,

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try to avoid car and bike go for a walk daily.

people

should not downplay the importance of walk. Drink lots of water to hydrate your body AND it

ALSO

help

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TO reduced weight. In conclusion, All over the world obesity is

common

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but stern

problem

but with the help of

exerise

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exercise

and proper

diet

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this

problem

will be TACKLE easily.

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Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic?

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