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Ownership of mobile phones has risen dramatically in the recent years despite the potentially harmful effects they may have on our health and society. Governments should introduce measures to restrict ownership of mobile phones to those who need them for their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the
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 has led to an increase in the number of users of mobile
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 as anyone can own them. Due to the easy access of
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 gadget, it has started harming
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’s health and have an adverse impact on society. Some
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 think that restricting the ownership of mobile
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 based on necessity should be put in action to reduce the harmful effects. But will
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 help? There are two sides to a coin.
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, there are different arguments from
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 who differ in their opinions. Many
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 like to own mobiles as they
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 them regularly for their work and for their personal
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. Right from waking up using an alarm, travelling to the office, ordering meals, teaching their children, booking a dinner table with family, going to bed and playing soft meditation music is done using a mobile phone which makes
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’s life easier.
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, over usage of any technology has its own consequences. For the one who relies on every small task on their mobile
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, they become addicted to its usage. The necessary screen time they spend on their work desktops versus the time spent looking at the phone screen is not balanced by
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.
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, it leads to health problems and increases the stress level. The excess
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 of
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 leads to eye pain, frequent headaches, lack of sleep, etc., which in turn deteriorates an individual's well-being from a young age.
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, using any cellular devices before going to bed can disrupt sleep due to the emission of harmful rays. To sum up, I believe that there should be some restrictions imposed on the ownership of mobile
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 by age group that would probably help children or youngsters to live a healthy life until the point they go for their higher studies or start working.
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, as adults can help to plan things for their children and manage multiple things, they should have the right to
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 mobile
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, but they should
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 consider the impact of its excessive usage on their fitness too.

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