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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

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In recent times, there has been a difference in the perspective of people on school life. Certain people are of the opinion that probably with advancements in technology,
children
 can be taught best at home while others believe in sending
children
 to school likely because they might be in
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 of growing
children
 in a more interactive environment. For the past few years, we have observed that there has been a rise in technologies targeted at
children
 like mobile applications or television programmes that help to arrange classroom scenarios at home.
Children
 can easily enjoy the options to learn rhymes, prepare their course work, make friends on zoom calls, give exams, etc. As the world is progressively moving towards digitization, it is important for
children
 to grow along and grasp quickly to match the pace. With the increase in the use of technology, it is equally important for
children
 to attend traditional schools which brings its own benefits.
Children
 when travel daily to school, play outdoor games with other
children
, attend instructor-led classes with a number of
children
 coming from different families, etc. tend to learn to be independent, are healthier
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 and feel more confident in handling multiple situations they encounter being with different people they meet every day. To sum up, I am of the opinion that
children
 should attend regular schools which is important for a child's personality development and growth.
However
, if there could be a flexible scenario where
children
 could
also
 study at home once a week would
also
 help them to learn with the rapidly growing technologies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tailored learning
  • peer pressure
  • flexibility
  • instill values
  • socialization
  • communication skills
  • specialized facilities
  • extracurricular activities
  • diversity
  • structured environment
  • customized education
  • well-rounded education
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